Taking away the guilt

Mrs. Stocklosa always tells us simple stories are better than convoluted twisted narratives, which I’ve become to embrace in a way. Yejin and I, through the guidance of Mrs. Stocklosa and my classmates, have cut the negative ending.
This may produce some issues mainly with time regarding our piece, but as you can see I’ve uploaded a completely new script which we are going to be adapting to which I have no doubt should reach the minimum requirements. Plus with filming, things never stick to plan- so it’s okay! The main reasoning for the change in script was because the negative ending I had planned would’ve made our main character look guilty, when what we really want to focus on was the kindness and selflessness they partake in. Though at the time of writing it sounding interesting purely due to the drama of it all, that is now the complete opposite of what Yejin and I would like for our project.


The previous ending:

SCHOOLMATE

KID PANICS BUT IS REASSURED WHEN SCHOOLMATE WALKS OVER, SMILES, AND BRINGS THEM TO THE CAKE

I'll bring you to it

KID AWKWARDLY PUTS SMALL GIFT ON TABLE NEXT TO ALL COOL ONES

THEY WALK OUT OF FRAME

SHOT OF PARENT NEXT TO FRIENDS IN FRONT OF PRESENTS

PARENT

OKAY EVERYONE! Time for presents!

EVERYONE GATHERS AROUND KID STILL HAS CAKE

MONTAGE OF BLANK OPENING PRESENTS 

LEAVING SMALLEST ONE FOR LAST 

YOU SEE A LARGE AMOUNT OF GLITTER AND WRAPPING PAPER ON THE FLOOR

SEE SHOTS OF EVERYONES REACTIONS AND KIDS EVER GROWING WORRY

ONLY BLANK IN SHOT SURROUNDED BY PAPER SYMMETRY (V WES ANDERSON)

PARENT 

Last but certainly not least… KID

PARENT HANDS KIDS GIFT TO BLANK

BLANK IS METHODICALLY OPENING PRESENT 

KID

Im sorry its really not that good i-

BLANK

Oh my god.

KID

I know, I know I shouldn't have co-

BLANK

THIS IS... THE SWEETEST PRESENT IVE EVER GOTTEN 

ALL FRIENDS LAUGH AND CLAP EXCEPT FOR SCHOOLMATE

BLANK LEAPS OVER TO HUG KID AS THEY STAND THERE IN SHOCK

SCHOOLMATE

THATS THE NICEST THING ANYONES EVER GOT YOU?

SCHOOLMATE STANDS THERE IN FURY THROWING DOWN PIECE OF THEIR CAKE TO FLOOR

BLANK

SCHOOLMATE I-

SCHOOLMATE 

You know kid stole that right? Why do you think they came here in our school uniform instead of real clothes, huh? THEY HAVE NOTHING!

BLANK

KID, is this true?

PARENT

VOICE ECHOS IN AND OUT AND HEARTBEAT GROWS 

I knew something was up im going to call 911

KID

NO! No, I- I have to go

SLOW MOTION? OF KID RUNNING OUT TO DOOR RUNNING INTO SIBLING ON THE WAY OUT OF THE DRIVEWAY

SIBLING

HEY! Are you okay monkey why didn't you call me i've been worried sick

SIBLING TAKES IN KID FOR A HUG AS YOU HEAR SIRENS IN THE BACKGROUND

CLOSE OF UP KIDS FACE WITH TEARS AS SCREEN GOES BLACK 

KID V.O

IM SORRY!